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Friday, June 17, 2016

100 word challenge: Girl in my closet

I was playing my violin when I heard a loud thud so I walked over to my closet where I had heard the noise I opened and found a little blue door I bent down on my knees and crawled into my closet and pushed the wood door till it opened I went threw door and he door closed everything went black.

I felt the floor drop I do’tn remember anything after that. I woke up on white bed I hear a loud screamed it echoed off the walls a little girl walked to me wearing a yellow shirt with an airplane on it
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4 comments:

  1. AnonymousJune 21, 2016 at 11:29 AM

    Hi Bree,

    Great job, awesome flow with your words and theme.
    Love the way that you incorporated all the words into it...especially the yellow top with the airplane picture on it! ;)

    -Nikita

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    1. AnonymousJune 22, 2016 at 12:53 PM

      Thanks Nikita for the lovely comment can not wait to read your 100 word challenge :-)

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  2. AnonymousJune 30, 2016 at 11:17 AM

    Hey Bree!
    I was really creeped out when I was reading this! I love how you don't know what happened to her. Next Steps: Do a re-read of your post as I found "don't" as "do’tn".
    Great work Bree can't wait for your next one.
    From Hannah

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    1. AnonymousJuly 5, 2016 at 11:48 AM

      Thanks for the feedback I will re read that I happy the story creeped you out thanks chiggin of a comment. From Bree

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